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The star who is living in my mind forever

임성준/2024-05-22

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Who do you think is the best all around athlete in the world? In your country? Why? >>> I think the best athlete in the world is the Lionel Messi. He is the most popular Argentina soccer player in the world because he is the most award-winning man in the world. Although he is following retirement course now, He had been a star when I was young. He spent his legendary years with my youth in the same period. He has not only personal awards for him and his club team but also world cup for his own country. And his mind is also world class. First He married his first love who met when he was 5 years old. Secondly He has donored many times. How romantic he is. I totally forgot having class today. sorry ㅠㅠ

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Brian! It's okay. I understand. ^^ Sometimes, it happens. Hope to see you later.

Good job on this homework!

~ Teacher Maxine

I think the best athlete in the world is the Lionel Messi.

>> I think the best athlete in the world is Lionel Messi.

He is the most popular Argentina soccer player in the world because he is the most award-winning man in the world.

>> He is the most popular Argentine soccer player in the world because he is the most award-winning man in the sport.

Although he is following retirement course now, He had been a star when I was young.

>> Although he is nearing retirement now, he was a star when I was young.

He spent his legendary years with my youth in the same period.

>> He spent his legendary years during the same period as my youth.

He has not only personal awards for him and his club team but also world cup for his own country.

>> He has not only won personal awards for himself and his club team but also a World Cup for his country.

And his mind is also world class.

>> And his character is also world-class.

First He married his first love who met when he was 5 years old.

>> First, he married his first love, whom he met when he was 5 years old.

Secondly He has donored many times. How romantic he is.

>> Secondly, he has donated many times. How romantic he is.