I enjoyed talking with you Gemma! Today's homework gave me chance to think. I appreciate your concerns. Enjoy your day! Thank you :)

Hi there Diego! Thanks again for your essay! I enjoy checking and appreciating your ideas! Your smart with your perspectives and I know that you write based on your experiences and insights. Keep it up!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

These days, older people who have retired often choose to spend money on themselves (for example on holidays) rather than save money for their children. 
Is this a positive or negative development?

 I respect the decision old people spending money on themselves rather than save money for their children. 

>>>  I respect the decision old people to spend their money on themselves rather than saving for their children. 

 These days children don't take care their parents. 

>>>  These days children don't take care of their parents. 

Taking care of old parents is a custom in agrarian society.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 That is why parents gave their assets to their children.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

However, nowadays, children do not live together with their parents. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

They leave their hometown for jobs. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^
Parents should take care of themselves. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

Money they had saved is only method to rely on.

>>> The money they saved is the only source to rely on.

 Since average life expectancy is rising, they should consider the future.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 I also believe children are already grown up and can make living for themselves.

>>>  I also believe that children can support themselves if they are already old enough.

 They are adults who got economy powers.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 They can sustain their lives.

>>> CORRECT~!^^
Children should be independent from their parents. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

Children should not be burden for their parents.

>>> CORRECT~!^^
 This is the most ideal track for both parents and children.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 However, Korean society is getting worse maintaining this track. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

Young generation are suffering from finding jobs.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 Their independence age is getting older. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

This situation gives big pressure to parents. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

Also young generation give up their marriage because of real estate problems. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

They cannot afford debts when they buy their house. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

So parents should help them when they buy their house.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 This custom steals parents' asset and make both children and parents poor. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^
 I agree that old people should spend their money for themselves. 

>>> CORRECT~!^^

However, the reality is getting worse.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 I hope our society becomes better.

>>> CORRECT~!^^