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Do you love yourself? Is it important to love yourself?
김영순/2024-05-15
회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Of course, I love myself.
Self-esteem is important for living.
It"s influenced by parents in childhood and by people in a social environment.
It has a positive power .
So, it helps to achieve a goal and to get through difficulties.
It makes people encouraging.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Young Soon!
You would be able to see the differences in the way you write each time.
Learn from your mistakes and become better in expressing yourself.
Let's keep this going.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Of course, I love myself.
>> Correct
Self-esteem is important for living.
Self-esteem is important for living.
>> Correct
It"s influenced by parents in childhood and by people in a social environment.
It"s influenced by parents in childhood and by people in a social environment.
>> It's influenced by parents during childhood and by other people in a social environment.
It has a positive power .
It has a positive power .
>> It has a positive impact.
So, it helps to achieve a goal and to get through difficulties.
So, it helps to achieve a goal and to get through difficulties.
>> Correct
It makes people encouraging.
It makes people encouraging.
>> It makes people feel motivated.
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