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What do you think of children doing household chores? Should they do household chores? Should they d

차진혁/2024-05-12

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I agree on children doing household chores, because they are doing household chores is very nice. Also doing household chores makes children feel curious, responsible,great. If all the family members do household chores, familyship will be good.
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Hello again, Jimmy!

Here's your revised essay. Please go over the revisions, such as removing the comma before the word "because". 
Have a good evening there!


Cheers,
Jean~~





         What do you think of children doing household chores? Should they do household chores or not? Why?


I agree on children doing household chores, because they are doing household chores is very nice.
>> I agree on children doing household chores because doing so is a good thing. 

Also doing household chores makes children feel curious, responsible,great.
>> Also, doing housework makes children feel curious, responsible, and great.

If all the family members do household chores, familyship will be good.
>> If all the family members do household chores, the family relationship will be good. 
 
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