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After the betrayal

양기연/2024-05-10

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After I noticed my former sister-in-law's embezzlement, I fired her. I did everything instead of her. For two years, my youngest brother shared my work partly. He was looking for a job after he failed in his own business. He wanted to start his own academy, so he wanted to experience and earn some money in my academy. After he found his job, I did everything with my daughters' help.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Gi Yean!

Thank you for sharing this with me. I am happy that you were able to trust again despite what happened with your sister-in-law. Also, I can see that you have a great support system like your brother and daughters who helped you during that time.

- T. Caitlyn

After I noticed my former sister-in-law's embezzlement, I fired her.

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I did everything instead of her.

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For two years, my youngest brother shared my work partly.

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He was looking for a job after he failed in his own business.

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He wanted to start his own academy, so he wanted to experience and earn some money in my academy.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: He wanted to start his own academy, so he sought to gain experience and earn some money by working in my academy

After he found his job, I did everything with my daughters' help.

>> CORRECT