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What are the advantages and disadvantages of fast food?

박혜연/2024-05-09

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think the advantage of fast food can eat easy and tasty. The other hand, disadvantage of it has a lot cholesterols. This makes people to become a obesity.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Hye Yeon! I agree with you. Fast food, indeed, is convenient and tasty, but it often contains high cholesterol, leading to obesity. Thank you for doing this composition.
~T. Jenna


I think the advantage of fast food can eat easy and tasty. 
>>I think the advantage of fast food is that it's easy to eat and tasty.
OR
>>I believe one of the advantages of fast food is its convenience and deliciousness.
The other hand, disadvantage of it has a lot cholesterols. 
>>On the other hand, the disadvantage of it is that it has a lot of cholesterol.
This makes people to become a obesity.
>>This leads to obesity in people.
OR
>> This makes people obese. 
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