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Who's your favorite actor? Why do you like him?

차유진/2024-05-07

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
My favorite actor is Kim Yoon Seok in the movie "NORYANG". Because he acted the role of Yi Sun shin, he is very great in the movie. I remembered the scene of before die.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Happy Tuesday evening there, Yale!

Here's your revised essay. Thank you very much for sending it. Please take a look at the corrections below, especially how I combined your first two sentences. Have a good one! 


Cheers,
Jean~~




                       Who's your favorite actor? Why do you like him?

My favorite actor is Kim Yoon Seok in the movie "NORYANG". Because he acted the role of Yi Sun shin, 
>> My favorite actor is Kim Yoon Seok in the movie "NORYANG" because he played the role of Yi Sun Shin. 

he is very great in the movie.
>> He did great in the movie. 

I remembered the scene of before die.
>> I remember the scene before he died. 
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