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정민섭/2024-05-07

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I want to describe especialy about Italy. When I arrived there, where is Dolomities. As I think there is most beutiful place in Italy. And it has fantastic scenery of mountiens. And second place is Venice. There is called by aqua city and a few years ago there had a flood, sometimes that happened despite there is a new tenology to prevent overflow.

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Hello Jeong,
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3. You have to choose proper adjectives when describing a noun.
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I want to describe especialy about Italy.
>> I would like to describe my vacation in Italy.
When I arrived there, where is Dolomities.As I think there is most beutiful place in Italy.
>> When I arrived in the Dolomites, I thought it was the most beautiful place in Italy.
And it has fantastic scenery of mountiens.
>> Because it has a fantastic scenery of mountains.

And second place is Venice.
>> The second place was in Venice.
There is called by aqua city and a few years ago there had a flood, sometimes that happened despite there is a new tenology to prevent overflow.
>> Aqua City was flooded a few years ago despite having new technology to prevent flooding.