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Could you tell me about your family? Write at least three things about your family.

차유진/2024-05-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I have a small family. There are four people in my family. My dad is salaried worker, he is good player in all games My mom is a alien (false) she is top Chef in my home . My brother is a student in elementary school, he is good brother, he likes reading books and Lego. I'm a treasure in my home.
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Good evening, Yale!

Here's your correctd homework. Many thanks for uploading it. Please take a looks at the alternative sentences and corrections given. Enjoy the rest of your holiday and catch you again on Wedneday! 


Cheers,
Jean~~




                            Could you tell me about your family? Write at least three things about your family.



I have a small family. 
>> OR: I don’t have a big family. 

There are four people in my family.
>> OR: There are 4 members in my family: my father, my mother, my older brother, and me.

My dad is salaried worker, he is good player in all games
>> My dad is a salaried worker and he is a good player in all games. 

My mom is a alien (false) she is top Chef in my home .
>> My mom is an alien (false) and she is the top Chef in my home.

My brother is a student in elementary school, he is good brother, he likes reading books and Lego.
>> My brother is a student in elementary school. He is a good brother and likes reading books and Legos. 
>> OR: My brother is an elementry school student. He's a good brother and enjoys reading books and playing with LEGOs. 

I'm a treasure in my home.
>> OR: I’m my family’s little treasure. 

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