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류건우/2024-04-30

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Q: What are the advantages and disadvantages of adventurous trips? A: I think the advantage of adventurous trip is that one can experience a lot of things. I think in people's life, experience would be one of the most important things, and if they go on an adventurous trip, than they can gain those. But I think the disadvantage of it is they will easily get tired.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes:

1. I think the advantage of adventurous trip is that one can experience a lot of things.

>>I think the advantage of an adventurous trip is that one can experience a lot of things.

2. I think in people's life, experience would be one of the most important things, and if they go on an adventurous trip, than they can gain those.

>>I think in people's lives, experience would be one of the most important things, and if they go on an adventurous trip, then they can gain those.

3. But I think the disadvantage of it is they will easily get tired.

>>However, I think the disadvantage of it is that they will easily get tired.