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장지혁/2024-04-29

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I agree with Emilia's opinion because I think all peaple have secret and they have what they don't want to show other people. If parents see their children's secret even if their children don't want to do it children will not trust their parents and don't want to talk with them.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Henry! Your message makes a good point about the importance of respecting people's secrets and privacy, especially between parents and children. Good job!

~ Teacher Maxine

I agree with Emilia's opinion because I think all peaple have secret and they have what they don't want to show other people.

>> I agree with Emilia's opinion because I believe that everyone has secrets and aspects of themselves they prefer to keep private.

If parents see their children's secret even if their children don't want to do it children will not trust their parents and don't want to talk with them.

>> If parents discover their children's secrets against their wishes, it can lead to a breakdown of trust, causing children to feel betrayed and reluctant to confide in their parents.