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What's the most popular toy you know? Write about it.

차유진/2024-04-28

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think the most popular toy is Lego. Lego was made in Denmark. Lego is block, Lego has many series.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Yale!


Here's your edited composition. Thank you for sending it. As always, take note of the alternative sentences or corrections, such as articles (a, an, the) and the way I combined separate sentences by using conjuctions, such as 'and'. 
See you soon! 


Cheers,
Jean~~




                      What's the most popular toy you know? Write about it.



I think the most popular toy is Lego.
>> OR: I believe the most popular one is Lego. 

Lego was made in Denmark.
>> OR: Legos are manufactured by the Lego Group, a company based in Denmark. 

Lego is block, Lego has many series.
>> Lego is a block and has many series. 
>> OR: Lego is a line of plastic construction toys. 


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