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나유진/2024-04-25

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As I apply for the position of Business Manager, I am interested in the gaming business department, where I can implement strategies and directions for the business through relevant metrics in the gaming industry. My experience in content sales involves collecting revenue and related metrics, interpreting meaningful results, and naturally, I seek to leverage this experience in the gaming field. Additionally, I aim to brainstorm and provide solutions on how to amplify results through events, marketing tactics, exposure methods, or collaboration attempts. While I have a preferred gaming genre, I have played and have an interest in various genres and platforms, and thus, I intend to strategize to achieve the best business metrics for the games I manage, regardless of genre.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Eugene!

Your response effectively communicates your qualifications, enthusiasm and willingness to explore various gaming genres. It's a well-crafted response. Good job!

~ Teacher Maxine

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My experience in content sales involves collecting revenue and related metrics, interpreting meaningful results, and naturally, I seek to leverage this experience in the gaming field.

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OR >> My background in content sales equips me with the skills to analyze revenue data effectively, and I am eager to apply this expertise to the gaming sector.

Additionally, I aim to brainstorm and provide solutions on how to amplify results through events, marketing tactics, exposure methods, or collaboration attempts.

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OR >> Furthermore, I am committed to generating innovative solutions to enhance outcomes through events, marketing strategies, exposure techniques, and collaborative efforts.

While I have a preferred gaming genre, I have played and have an interest in various genres and platforms, and thus, I intend to strategize to achieve the best business metrics for the games I manage, regardless of genre.

>> CORRECT