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Which among the birthstones do you like best?

박준현/2024-04-22

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I like the garnet, diamond, ruby, shappire and emerald. First, garnet is my favorite color is red. Second, the diamond is I knowed the first stone. Third, ruby is my birthstone. Forth, sahppire is the blue glow is beautiful. Lastly, emerald is the green glow is beautiful too. My top is diamond. It's diamond because the diamond has many colors. Which birthstone do you like? These are the my favorite bithstones.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Henry!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Always do your best!
~ T. Camille

I like the garnet, diamond, ruby, shappire and emerald.
>> I like the garnet, diamond, ruby, sapphire, and emerald.
First, garnet is my favorite color is red.
>> First, garnet is one of my favorites because I like the color red.
Second, the diamond is I knowed the first stone.
>> Second, the diamond is the first stone I knew.
Third, ruby is my birthstone.
>> CORRECT!
Forth, sahppire is the blue glow is beautiful.
>> Forth, sapphire is the blue stone that when it glows, it is beautiful.
Lastly, emerald is the green glow is beautiful too.
>> Lastly, when an emerald glows, it's beautiful, too.
My top is diamond.
>> My topmost favorite is the diamond.
It's diamond because the diamond has many colors.
>> It's the diamond because it has many colors.
Which birthstone do you like?
>> CORRECT!
These are the my favorite bithstones.
>> These are my favorite bithstones.

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