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권경희/2024-04-19

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I guss that human don't want to coexist with other species like animals. Only human want to monopolize and enjoy every space and envernment of the world including even the universe. Nowdays humans pursue technological advancement like developing human robot.
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Good day, Ms. Lily!
There are a lot of things that run in the human mind. But will you agree that the human mind is full of greed? We can never be satisfied especially those who are in authority.
Have a great weekend!
Aki~

I guss that human don't want to coexist with other species like animals.
>>> I guess humans don't want to coexist with other species like animals.


Only human want to monopolize and enjoy every space and envernment of the world including even the universe.
>>>  Only humans want to monopolize and enjoy every space and environment of the world including even the universe.
>>> Humans want to monopolize the world and the universe.

Nowdays humans pursue technological advancement like developing human robot.
>>> nowadays humans pursue technological advancement like developing human robots.
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