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김순님/2024-04-19

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I know the history of perfume. Long time ago, women who were high position in French. They wore a dress which coudn’t take them off easily at the gathering. They peed with wearing dress. So they needed something to hide smell of pee and sweat.

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Hi, Ms. Sunny!

You know what? These are the things that I often think about but fail to get information on. There are so many things I would kike to know like the history of pens, bath soap, etc.

Thank you for sharing this! And it sounds "funny"^^

Aki~

I know the history of perfume.

>>> CORRECT!

Long time ago, women who were high position in French.

>>> A long time ago, women who were in high positions in France

>>> A long time ago, some women held a high position in France.

They wore a dress which coudn’t take them off easily at the gathering.

>>>> They wore dresses that couldn't;t be easily taken off at gatherings.

They peed with wearing dress.

>>> They peed on their dresses.

So they needed something to hide smell of pee and sweat.

>>> So they needed something to hide the smell of pee and sweat.