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Operating cafe

임유진/2024-04-18

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

It is neccessary to clarify the purpose of operating cafe to prioritize the things we should prepare. Normally, the purpose of operating cafe is divided into two reasons, profit generation or value realization. For the former case, we should position cafe into market by researching the cafe market and analyzing expected profit thoroughly. However, for the latter case, we can be just free to set the cafe in a way satisfying ourselves. And also, although many people have a dream of operating cafe, I believe that operating personal business is very challenging thing.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey Yu Jin! Great start on clarifying the purpose of operating a cafe! Your differentiation between profit generation and value realization sets a clear framework for approaching business strategies.

~T. Jenna

It is neccessary to clarify the purpose of operating cafe to prioritize the things we should prepare.

>>It is necessary to clarify the purpose of operating a cafe to prioritize the things we should prepare.

OR
>>It is essential to define the cafe’s purpose to prioritize our preparations effectively.

Normally, the purpose of operating cafe is divided into two reasons, profit generation or value realization.

>>Normally, the purpose of operating a cafe is divided into two reasons: profit generation or value realization.

>>Typically, the purpose of operating a cafe falls into two categories: generating profit or realizing value.

For the former case, we should position cafe into market by researching the cafe market and analyzing expected profit thoroughly.

>>In the former case, we should position the cafe in the market by thoroughly researching the cafe market and analyzing expected profits.

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>>In the former case, we should strategically position the cafe in the market by conducting thorough research on cafe trends and carefully analyzing potential profits.

However, for the latter case, we can be just free to set the cafe in a way satisfying ourselves.

>>However, in the latter case, we are free to set up the cafe in a way that satisfies us.

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>>However, in the latter case, we have the freedom to arrange the cafe however we please.

And also, although many people have a dream of operating cafe, I believe that operating personal business is very challenging thing.

>>And, although many people dream of operating a cafe, I believe that running a personal business is a very challenging thing/endeavor.