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What qualities do you think make someone a good firefighter, and why do you think firefighting is su

박순호/2024-04-18

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Firefighters must be physically strong and have specialized knowledge and skills regarding fires and disasters because they have to extinguish fires, rescue people, and handle various disasters. Additionally, professional knowledge and accident recovery skills will need to be further strengthened through continuous training. Above all, I think it is important to cultivate a strong spirit of service to citizens. Firefighters sometimes have to be willing to risk their lives to rescue citizens at dangerous disaster sites. In fact, many firefighters are seriously injured or killed while responding to disasters. That's why I think firefighters deserve respect from citizens. I also believe that the government should actively provide various equipment to help them work in safer conditions and also pay attention to improving their salaries and welfare.

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Good morning, Sun!

A successful firefighter can adapt to their situations to overcome any obstacles that may prevent them from performing their duties. Adaptability means being able to change with circumstances, which is an important skill for an emergency responder because they're often the first people at a fire.

- Kristine ^^

Firefighters must be physically strong and have specialized knowledge and skills regarding fires and disasters because they have to extinguish fires, rescue people, and handle various disasters.

>> Correct.
Additionally, professional knowledge and accident recovery skills will need to be further strengthened through continuous training.

>> Additionally, through ongoing training, professional knowledge and accident recovery skills will need to be reinforced.
Above all, I think it is important to cultivate a strong spirit of service to citizens.

>> Correct.
Firefighters sometimes have to be willing to risk their lives to rescue citizens at dangerous disaster sites.

>> Correct.

Or >> Firefighters must put their lives in jeopardy in order to save civilians at hazardous disaster sites.

In fact, many firefighters are seriously injured or killed while responding to disasters.

>> In fact, a large number of firefighters suffer fatalities or severe injuries while battling catastrophes.
That's why I think firefighters deserve respect from citizens.

>> Correct.

I also believe that the government should actively provide various equipment to help them work in safer conditions and also pay attention to improving their salaries and welfare.

>> I also believe that the government should actively provide various pieces of equipment to help them work in safer conditions and also pay attention to improving their salaries and welfare.