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homework 04.15

최 건/2024-04-15

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~ Writing Task: Please answer the question: How does rain influence fashion and design? The influence of the weather give affects many things. Also, the weather affects fashion a lot. Among them, I'll introduce the weather of Britain. The UK is well known, it rains often country. It rains and stop several times a day. But, there rain is not heavy rain such as rain showers. Instead, there is light rain like a drizzle rain. So, when I went first time there, I was surprised. Because, many people don't well use umbrellas in the rain. Instead, I saw them generally enjoy wearing raincoats or waterproof clothes.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How does rain influence fashion and design?

The influence of the weather give affects many things.

>> The influence of the weather affects many things.

Also, the weather affects fashion a lot.

>> CORRECT!

Among them, I'll introduce the weather of Britain.

>> CORRECT!

The UK is well-known, it rains often country.

>> The UK is well-known, it rains often in this country.

OR >> It often rains in the UK.

It rains and stop several times a day.

>> It rains and eventually stops several times a day.

But, there rain is not heavy rain such as rain showers.

>> But, it doesn't rain heavily, just rain showers.

Instead, there is light rain like a drizzle rain.

>> Instead, there is light rain.

OR >> Instead, there is only a drizzle.

So, when I went first time there, I was surprised.

>> So, when I went there for first time, I was surprised.

Because, many people don't well use umbrellas in the rain.

>> That's because many people don't use umbrellas under the rain.

Instead, I saw them generally enjoy wearing raincoats or waterproof clothes.

>> CORRECT!