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Vocabulary

임유진/2024-04-15

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

[Anxiousness] Since we are often overwhelmed by feelings of anxiousness, trying in a new way is not easy. [Awaken] To awaken interest and passion in our mind, we should challenge new things by going outside and having time with people. [thrill] When we feel a big thrill, it plays a role as a stimulant by giving us continuous dopamine.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Ms. Yu Jin! Great sentences and ideas. Please check the points for improvement below.

~T. Jenna

[Anxiousness]
Since we are often overwhelmed by feelings of anxiousness, trying in a new way is not easy.
>>Since we are often overwhelmed by feelings of anxiousness, trying something new is not easy.

>> Since we frequently experience overwhelming feelings of anxiousness, attempting something new can be challenging.
[Awaken]
To awaken interest and passion in our mind, we should challenge new things by going outside and having time with people.
>>To awaken interest and passion in our minds, we should challenge ourselves with new things/experiences by going outside and having/spending time with people.
[thrill]
When we feel a big thrill, it plays a role as a stimulant by giving us continuous dopamine.

>>When we feel a big thrill, it plays/acts as a stimulant by continuously giving us/releasing dopamine.