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윤영선/2024-04-14

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I used to be stressed out, because it seems to be related to a perfect and responsible personality. Moderate stress is a driving force in life and a force in achieving something.When I was stressed, I had no appetite as a physical symptom, so I lost my desire to eat something and lost weight. Another experience was that I could not concentrate on what to do and what to do.

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Stress can cause many negative effects on our lives. We must know how to deal with or manage them. Good work, Mia. ^^

-Khai

I used to be stressed out, because it seems to be related to a perfect and responsible personality.

>> I used to be stressed out. My stress seems to be related to a perfect and responsible personality.

Moderate stress is a driving force in life and a force in achieving something.

>> Moderate stress is a driving force in life and that force is to achieve something.

When I was stressed, I had no appetite as a physical symptom, so I lost my desire to eat something and lost weight.

>> CORRECT

Another experience was that I could not concentrate on what to do and what to do.

>> Another experience was that I could not concentrate on what to do and what not to do.

>> In addition to that, I had a difficult time choosing what needed to be done.