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Do you enjoy outdoor activities like hiking or camping? Why or why not?

박소은/2024-04-12

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I like outdoor activities because when I go outside I feel happy but also I don't like outdoor activies. It's becasue when we go outside when it is spring or summer there or lot of parasites and bugs. Also there are bees.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Sunny!
It's nice to get out of your comfort zone and talk about unfamiliar topics.
You handled yourself pretty well with this composition.
The expressions used were good.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon

I like outdoor activities because when I go outside I feel happy but also I don't like outdoor activies.

>> I like outdoor activities because when I go outside, I feel happy but there are times when I also don't like them.
It's becasue when we go outside when it is spring or summer there or lot of parasites and bugs.

>> It's because when we go outside when it is spring or summer, there are a lot of parasites and bugs.
Also there are bees.

>> There are also bees.