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나유진/2024-04-12

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Certainly, the most exciting prospect for me is launching a game and garnering positive reactions from users. Having consistently collaborated in content production and distribution across mediums like movies, theater, and webtoons, I understand the satisfaction of presenting the finished product to people, achieving good results through sales and evaluations. Now, I aspire to contribute to the creation and distribution process of games I've enjoyed playing, aiming to evoke such positive feedback. I am eager for the sense of accomplishment that comes with it, which motivates my application. Furthermore, leveraging this experience in positive game distribution, I aim to eventually challenge myself to become a team leader. I want to manage people, help drive projects to success efficiently, and mentor industry newcomers like my former self, enabling them to achieve their best performance
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Eugene!
Your paragraph conveys a clear passion for game development and a desire to contribute positively to the industry. Overall, your message is concise and compelling. :) Great job!
~ Teacher Maxine 

Certainly, the most exciting prospect for me is launching a game and garnering positive reactions from users. 
>> CORRECT!

Having consistently collaborated in content production and distribution across mediums like movies, theater, and webtoons, I understand the satisfaction of presenting the finished product to people, achieving good results through sales and evaluations. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> With a history of collaborative efforts in content production and distribution spanning various mediums such as movies, theater, and webtoons, I comprehend the gratification of presenting a polished product to audiences and achieving favorable outcomes through sales and evaluations.

Now, I aspire to contribute to the creation and distribution process of games I've enjoyed playing, aiming to evoke such positive feedback. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Presently, my ambition lies in participating in the development and distribution of games that have captivated my interest, with the aim of evoking similarly positive responses.

I am eager for the sense of accomplishment that comes with it, which motivates my application. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I am driven by the sense of achievement that accompanies such endeavors, fueling my enthusiasm for this application.

Furthermore, leveraging this experience in positive game distribution, I aim to eventually challenge myself to become a team leader. 
>> Furthermore, by leveraging this experience in positive game distribution, I aim to eventually challenge myself to become a team leader.

I want to manage people, help drive projects to success efficiently, and mentor industry newcomers like my former self, enabling them to achieve their best performance.
>> CORRECT!







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