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HOMEWORK: Name anything you would like to improve about yourself.

이하은/2024-04-10

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

there a problem that i really fix it. i have a li of i want to do , so i try various things. but i lack persistence. so i try to do it until the end. for example, i tried english but failed many times. but now i will try until good.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Eve!~

It's wonderful to know you have something like a bucket list. Trying various things in life is good for our self-development as we allow ourselves to experience whatever we can. So, I hope you will be able to tick them all ^^

Chammy:)

there a problem that i really fix it.
>> If there's a really fix it.

i have a li of i want to do , so i try various things.

>> I have a list of what I want to do, so I try various things.

but i lack persistence.
>> But I lack persistence.

so i try to do it until the end.
>> Even though, I still try to do it until the end.

for example, i tried english but failed many times.
>> For example, I tried English but I failed many times.

but now i will try until good.

>> However, I will keep on trying until I improve.