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The age to vote

양기연/2024-04-10

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In our country, those who are over eighteen have the right to vote. I think that eighteen is reasonable minimum age. Because I see my students of that same age think and judge some political issues, I disagree with the concerns that the high school seniors are immature and lack political insight.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you, Gi Yean!

I really appreciate that you take the time to do your homework! I agree with you. By the age of eighteen, many individuals have reached a level of maturity where they are capable of making their own decisions. At this age, people are often considered adults and are legally allowed to vote, serve in the military, and enter into contracts.

- T. Caitlyn

In our country, those who are over eighteen have the right to vote.

>> CORRECT

I think that eighteen is reasonable minimum age.

>> I think that eighteen is a reasonable minimum age.

Because I see my students of that same age think and judge some political issues, I disagree with the concerns that the high school seniors are immature and lack political insight.

>> Because I see students of that same age thinking critically and making judgments on political issues, I disagree with the concerns that high school seniors are immature and lack political insight.