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What holiday in your country do you think should be abolished?

김병욱/2024-04-10

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think holiday is very important parts of my life. bacause in my country, most working person want it to more weekends, but we have just two days weekends so tired. i would rather suggest make a new one. for example 'The day have to rest' Today is election day in Korea. Send me to the National Assembly!
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Great day, Dan!
Indeed holiday is one of the most special day for workers. This is the time when workers can have additional rest and should ot be deprived to enjoy it.
Have a great holiday!
T. Aki~

I think holiday is very important parts of my life. bacause in my country, most working person want it to more weekends, but we have just two days weekends so tired.
>>>  I believe that holidays are an important part of my life. In my country, most working people wish for more weekends, but we only have two-day weekends which leaves us exhausted.

i would rather suggest make a new one. for example 'The day have to rest'
>>> I would suggest creating a new one instead, for example, "The Day of Rest".

Today is election day in Korea. Send me to the National Assembly!
>>> Today is Election Day in Korea! I will go and cast my vote!
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