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My parent's advice

양기연/2024-04-09

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I remember my father's advice vividly. When I lost an important race and was disappointed at the fact that next morning I faced my friends and teachers, my dad came over to me and consoled me saying that over time I am going to face many successes and failures at the same time. He said that this failure would make you have the power to deal with some failures. At that time I was a senior of high school. Decades of years have passed,but I have kept my father's advice deep in mind. So I am not afraid of failing or missing anything.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Gi Yean!
The advice that you received from your father was really great and motivating. It's nice that he made you understand at a young age that failure is a part of life and that each failure can make you stronger as a person. Thank you for sharing it with me! 
- T. Caitlyn
I remember my father's advice vividly. 
>> CORRECT
When I lost an important race and was disappointed at the fact that next morning I faced my friends and teachers, my dad came over to me and consoled me saying that over time I am going to face many successes and failures at the same time. 
>> When I lost an important race and felt disappointed at the fact that the next morning, I had to face my friends and teachers, my dad came over to me and consoled me, saying that over time I would experience both successes and failures.
He said that this failure would make you have the power to deal with some failures. 
>> He said that this failure would give me the strength to deal with future failures.
At that time I was a senior of high school. 
>> At that time, I was a senior in high school.
Decades of years have passed,but I have kept my father's advice deep in mind. 
>> CORRECT
So I am not afraid of failing or missing anything.
>> CORRECT
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