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김순님/2024-04-09

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We don’t advertise the Tabasco at the tv or other mass media. People wouldn’t accept it. Smoking people are more and more increasing in korea although it disappear in tv. We are broadcasting the harmful of smoking and informing it can be caused lung cancer
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Good morning, Ms. Sunny!
Similarly in the Philippines, we do not see any advertisements about tobacco and cigarettes.
We all know the negative effects of cigarettes so the government wants to encourage people to quit smoking.
Thank you! 
T. Aki~

We don’t advertise the Tabasco at the tv or other mass media.
>>> We don’t advertise tobacco on the TV or other mass media. 

People wouldn’t accept it.
>> CORRECT!

Smoking people are more and more increasing in korea although it disappear in tv.
>>> The number of people who smoke in Korea is increasing, despite it being less visible on television

We are broadcasting the harmful of smoking and informing it can be caused lung cancer
>>> We are broadcasting a warning about the harmful effects of smoking, including the increased risk of lung cancer.
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