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Difficult decision which didn't work

양기연/2024-04-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

During the last three years of Corona, I had difficulty managing my academy. The number of students was gradually declining. To attract new students I started a new advertisement through Naver. And I suggested some discount or some benefits to new students or those who brought friends. But they didn't work.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Gi Yean!

Thank you for doing your homework. I totally understand the situation you cited in your homework. During the pandemic, there were a lot of alternatives for students to learn, so it must have been very difficult for you to recruit new students. Anyway, I'm glad that everything is going well with your academy now!

- T. Caitlyn

During the last three years of Corona, I had difficulty managing my academy.

>> During the last three years of the Corona pandemic, I had difficulty managing my academy.

The number of students was gradually declining.

>> CORRECT

To attract new students I started a new advertisement through Naver.

>> CORRECT

And I suggested some discount or some benefits to new students or those who brought friends.

>> And I suggested offering some discounts or benefits to new students or those who brought friends.

But they didn't work.

>> CORRECT