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How does social media affect people's self-esteem? Share your opinion.

이진태/2024-04-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I disagree with using a social media. These days, Many people upload their photo on a social media such as a enjoying vacation at a fancy resorts and restaurant. However, It's manipulated. it's not real life. it's a bluff. Some people thought when they watched other's photo in a social media, "I'm poor". So their self-esteem is decreased.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi JT! I think social media does indeed have a huge effect on people and somehow social media is used for showing off. Thank you for sharing your ideas.

~~Teacher Ryka^^

I disagree with using a social media.

>> I disagree with using social media.

These days, Many people upload their photo on a social media such as a enjoying vacation at a fancy resorts and restaurant.

>> These days, many people upload their photos on social media, such as enjoying vacations at fancy resorts and restaurants.

However, It's manipulated. it's not real life. it's a bluff.
>> However, it's manipulated. It's not real life; it's a bluff.

Some people thought when they watched other's photo in a social media, "I'm poor".

>> Some people think that when they see others' photos on social media, they feel 'I'm poor.'

So their self-esteem is decreased.

>> As a result, their self-esteem decreases.