POWER ENGLISH

현재위치

> 영작교정 첨삭 서비스

Missed investments

양기연/2024-04-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I have missed opportunities to earn big money. What I regret the most is that I sold my mom's house. At that time her Parkinson disease grew worse, so I persuaded her to come to my house. I hesitated to sell her apartment because the price was lower than before. Additionally I wanted to buy a lower apartment for investment for my daughters. But my mom wanted to sell and give a down-payment for my house. After selling it, the price of the apartment has risen a lot.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Friday, Gi Yean!

I'd like to agree with you when you said that this situation is a missed opportunity. Nowadays, the prices of real estate have skyrocketed, so those who own properties are secure, but those who don't struggle a lot. Hopefully, we won't have missed opportunities in the future.

- T. Caitlyn

I have missed opportunities to earn big money.

>> CORRECT

What I regret the most is that I sold my mom's house.

>> CORRECT

At that time her Parkinson disease grew worse, so I persuaded her to come to my house.

>> At that time, her Parkinson's disease grew worse, so I persuaded her to come to my house.

I hesitated to sell her apartment because the price was lower than before.

>> CORRECT

Additionally I wanted to buy a lower apartment for investment for my daughters.

>> Additionally, I wanted to buy a cheaper apartment as an investment for my daughters.

But my mom wanted to sell and give a down-payment for my house.

>> But my mom wanted to sell her house and use the down-payment to stay in my house.

After selling it, the price of the apartment has risen a lot.

>> CORRECT