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Talk about a problem in your community and propose a solution.

이진태/2024-04-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

In Korea, there is a issue about birthrate. Because, it is too lower than the past It is too difficult problem. If the expense of raising baby could be decreased, like a education fee, many people could raise a baby.

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Hey JT! Thank you for sharing your idea about the problem in your community.

~~Teacher Ryka^^

In Korea, there is a issue about birthrate. Because, it is too lower than the past

>> In Korea, there is an issue about the birthrate because it is lower than in the past.

It is too difficult problem.

>> It is a very difficult problem.

If the expense of raising baby could be decreased, like a education fee, many people could raise a baby.

>> If the expenses of raising a baby could be decreased, such as education fees, many people could afford to raise a baby.