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As my interest in gaming grew, I've had the opportunity to expand my personal gaming experiences across various genres and platforms. Originally, I was primarily a PC MMORPG player, delving into games like Final Fantasy XIV, Blade & Soul, Lost Ark, Bless, and Black Desert Online, where I accumulated experience in party play with numerous users. Additionally, I honed my cooperative gaming skills through FPS games like Overwatch, engaging in voice chat teamwork. However, my focus shifted when I began playing collectible RPGs such as Genshin Impact, Blue Archive, and Lords Mobile, enjoying concentrated play on mobile platforms. Transitioning from casual mobile games to open-world RPGs and strategy squad games in the form of collectible RPGs, I experienced a platform expansion firsthand. Currently, I am deeply engaged in playing package games with cross-platform support on consoles and PC. From AAA titles like Baldur's Gate 3 to indie-like games such as Dive The Diver and Dungreed, I've ~
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Hello, Eugene!
Your response effectively highlights your diverse gaming experiences across different platforms and genres, maintaining a professional tone throughout . To strengthen it further, emphasize how your adaptability, problem-solving abilities, and teamwork skills developed through gaming can contribute to the specific needs of the company or team you're interviewing with. Overall, it's a great response!
~ Teacher Maxine

As my interest in gaming grew, I've had the opportunity to expand my personal gaming experiences across various genres and platforms. 
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Originally, I was primarily a PC MMORPG player, delving into games like Final Fantasy XIV, Blade & Soul, Lost Ark, Bless, and Black Desert Online, where I accumulated experience in party play with numerous users. 
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OR >> In the beginning, I focused mainly on PC MMORPGs, immersing myself in games like Final Fantasy XIV, Blade & Soul, Lost Ark, Bless, and Black Desert Online, where I gained experience in collaborative play with numerous users.

Additionally, I honed my cooperative gaming skills through FPS games like Overwatch, engaging in voice chat teamwork. 
>> CORRECT! 
OR >> Furthermore, I refined my cooperative gaming skills by playing FPS games like Overwatch, actively participating in voice chat teamwork.

However, my focus shifted when I began playing collectible RPGs such as Genshin Impact, Blue Archive, and Lords Mobile, enjoying concentrated play on mobile platforms. 
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Transitioning from casual mobile games to open-world RPGs and strategy squad games in the form of collectible RPGs, I experienced a platform expansion firsthand. 
>> CORRECT!

Currently, I am deeply engaged in playing package games with cross-platform support on consoles and PC. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> At present, I am deeply immersed in playing packaged games with cross-platform support on consoles and PC.

From AAA titles like Baldur's Gate 3 to indie-like games such as Dive The Diver and Dungreed, I've ~
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