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양기연/2024-04-02

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If someone is concerned about gaining weight or intestine problems such as digestion. I want to give a suggestion of practicing time-restricted diets or intermittent fasting. Actually many studies show that time-restricted diet is one of the effective ways to lose weight. And it also helps to improve stomach problems. I have practiced that kind of diet, although not in a perfect way. It is good in managing my weight and improving my digestion and constipation.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Gi Yean!
I think your advice is very helpful, especially considering that nowadays, the case of obesity is increasing and a lot of people have gained weight, particularly during the pandemic when we were not able to do anything but stay at home and eat. I believe it requires a lot of determination and discipline to maintain a routine regarding intermittent fasting.
- T. Caitlyn
If someone is concerned about gaining weight or intestine problems such as digestion. 
>> CORRECT
>> OR: If someone is concerned about gaining weight or experiencing intestinal problems, such as digestion issues.
I want to give a suggestion of practicing time-restricted diets or intermittent fasting. 
>> I want to suggest practicing time-restricted diets or intermittent fasting.
Actually many studies show that a time-restricted diet is one of the effective ways to lose weight. 
>> CORRECT
And it also helps to improve stomach problems. 
>> CORRECT
I have practiced that kind of diet, although not in a perfect way. 
>> CORRECT
It is good in managing my weight and improving my digestion and constipation.
>> It is good for managing my weight and improving my digestion, as well as alleviating constipation.
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