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권경희/2024-04-01

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I don't like the environment that temperature gap is big for a year. If I could live in another country, I'like to live the Mediterranean area. Particuarly I am getting older, I don't like capricious seasonal difference in Korea.
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Ms. Lily!
Thank you for this. It's the same in my city. Most people that I know, move to a warmer place when they get older, that is also the advice of doctors to our relatives. Well, I guess we just need to do whatever will make us comfortable.
 Aki~

I don't like the environment that temperature gap is big for a year.
>>>  I don't like the environment the temperature gap is big for a year.
  
If I could live in another country, I'like to live the Mediterranean area.
>>> If I could live in another country, I like to live in the Mediterranean area.

Particuarly I am getting older, I don't like capricious seasonal difference in Korea.
>>> Particularly I am getting older, and I don't like capricious seasonal differences in Korea.
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