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윤영선/2024-03-27

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Diet Recommendations for 40s 1. In your 40s, your muscle mass decreases, so you exercise regularly. You have to work hard to maintain your muscles. 2. In their 40s, they enter menopause, so they get enough sleep and reduce stress. 3. In your 40s, you need to take care of nutrients that you lack from taking nutritional supplements. 4. In your 40s, you need to eat balanced foods such as protein, minerals, and vitamins. Diet Recommendations for teens 1. You should get enough sleep for seven to nine hours a day. 2. Eat breakfast, lunch, and dinner on time and avoid snacks or late-night snacks. 3. Avoid sugar or sweet foods and eat quality foods.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for providing a comprehensive list, Mia. Very good! ^^ You have given helpful diet recommendations for teens and people at their 40s.

-Khai

Diet Recommendations for 40s

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1. In your 40s, your muscle mass decreases, so you exercise regularly.

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>> The muscle mass decreases when a person becomes 40 years old, so regular exercise is a must.

You have to work hard to maintain your muscles.

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>> One must work hard to maintain the good condition of his muscles.

2. In their 40s, they enter menopause, so they get enough sleep and reduce stress.

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>> Women in their 40s enter menopause, so they should get enough sleep and minimize stress.

3. In your 40s, you need to take care of nutrients that you lack from taking nutritional supplements.

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>> When a person reaches his 40s, he should replenish the lacking nutrients in his body by taking supplements.

4. In your 40s, you need to eat balanced foods such as protein, minerals, and vitamins.

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>> Lastly, a person should eat well-balanced meals with protein, minerals, and vitamins.

Diet Recommendations for teens

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1. You should get enough sleep for seven to nine hours a day.

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>> Teens should sleep seven to nine hours every day.

2. Eat breakfast, lunch, and dinner on time and avoid snacks or late-night snacks.

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>> They should eat meals on time, and avoid unhealthy snacks, especially at late-night.

3. Avoid sugar or sweet foods and eat quality foods.

>> 3. Avoid sugary or sweet foods and eat quality foods.