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Take Three Things To Desert Island

박소율/2024-03-27

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I would take a boat, many books and many food to a desert island. Because there are no Wifi, so I couldn't use smartphone or laptop there. If I want to go home, I can go by boat. And I don't have something to do in a desert island, then I will be very bored. So I will take books and read it. Finally, there are less food so I will always hungry, so I will take many food.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Julie. Well done on accomplishing your homework. Here are some corrections for clarification of the thoughts and grammar.

^^T. Ara

I would take a boat, many books and many food to a desert island.

>>> I would take a boat, many books, and plenty of food to a desert island
Because there are no Wifi, so I couldn't use smartphone or laptop there.

>>> because there is no Wi-Fi, so I couldn't use a smartphone or laptop there.

If I want to go home, I can go by boat.

>>> If I want to go home, I can go by boat.
And I don't have something to do in a desert island, then I will be very bored.

>>> Since there's not much to do on a desert island, I would be very bored,
So I will take books and read it.

>>> so I will take books to read.
Finally, there are less food so I will always hungry, so I will take many food.

>>> Lastly, since there's less food, I will always be hungry, so I will take plenty of food with me.