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What was the most memorable advice you have received from a friend? Why was is memorable?

송명하/2024-03-27

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The most memorable advice I have received from my friend is 'Be myself'. When I heard it at first, I could not accommodate easily on my life. However, I understood his advice when I lose myself in the society, not in the campus where I could do what I want. By reflecting my position to the business objectives, I have realized some difference on my life cycle. For example, I used to keep sleeping during the whole weekends and I avoided using time for my hobbies. After my internship contract was over I planned to prevent myself from this regret that was going to be a big threat in my life. I started to do what I used to like - playing drums and watching live football matches. Thanks to my big brother, I found this priceless treasure in his vineyard(or wisdom).

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Matthew,
It's always nice to read your compositions. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Demi ^^

The most memorable advice I have received from my friend is 'Be myself'.

CORRECT!

When I heard it at first, I could not accommodate easily on my life.
>> Initially, I struggled to incorporate this into my life.

However, I understood his advice when I lose myself in the society, not in the campus where I could do what I want.
>> However, I understood the wisdom behind it when I realized that I was losing myself in society, instead of embracing who I was on campus where I had the freedom to be myself.

By reflecting my position to the business objectives, I have realized some difference on my life cycle.
>>By reflecting my position to the business objectives, I have realized some differences in my life cycle.

For example, I used to keep sleeping during the whole weekends and I avoided using time for my hobbies.
>> For example, I previously used to sleep through the entire weekend and neglected my hobbies.

After my internship contract was over I planned to prevent myself from this regret that was going to be a big threat in my life.
CORRECT!
OR>> After my internship ended, I decided to avoid the regret that would have been a major threat in my life.

I started to do what I used to like - playing drums and watching live football matches.
CORRECT!
OR>> I started doing things I enjoyed, such as playing drums and watching live football matches.

Thanks to my big brother, I found this priceless treasure in his vineyard(or wisdom).
CORRECT!
OR>>I owe this self-discovery to my older brother, who shared this invaluable wisdom with me.