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Did you enjoy your childhood?

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I guess I didn't enjoy my childhood.
My parents often argued and my father was drinker.
He always drunk and yelled to my siblings.
When I was youg I was not happy.I didn't have good memory
But my mom really loved us ,thanks to her our siblings grew up fine.

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Hello, Ms. Ju Mi! It must have been hard to go through that, especially with the arguments and the challenges at home. But it sounds like your mom's love and care made a huge difference in your life and helped you and your siblings get through it. It's brave of you to share this, and I hope you're finding peace and strength as you move forward.
-T. Sonny
I guess I didn't enjoy my childhood.
>>Correct!
My parents often argued and my father was drinker.
>>My parents often argued, and my father was a heavy drinker.
He always drunk and yelled to my siblings.
>>He was always drunk and yelled at my siblings.
When I was youg I was not happy.
>>When I was young, I wasn't happy.
I didn't have good memory
>>I don¡¯t have many good memories from that time.
But my mom really loved us ,thanks to her our siblings grew up fine.
>>But my mom really loved us, and thanks to her, my siblings and I grew up well.
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