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HOMEWORK: Who were the most important people in your childhood? Why?

The most important person in my childhood was my mom!
When I was little, I was terrified of being away from her.
I still remember the first day I went to preschool when I was five—
as soon as I couldn¡¯t see her, I stood and cried the whole day.
I cried so much that my mom eventually had to come back and pick me up.
I think I must have been a difficult child to raise.
I¡¯m really thankful to my mom.

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Hello Isabel. What a heartfelt story you have! Your writing beautifully captures the bond between you and your mom, and it¡¯s easy to feel the emotion in your memory. You expressed everything clearly, with just a couple of minor changes for smoothness. Thank you for sharing such a sweet and meaningful part of your childhood. Your appreciation for your mom truly shines.

~ T. Lia

The most important person in my childhood was my mom!
>> CORRECT

When I was little, I was terrified of being away from her.
>> CORRECT

I still remember the first day I went to preschool when I was five.
>> I still remember the first day I went to preschool when I was five. 

as soon as I couldn¡¯t see her, I stood and cried the whole day.
>> As soon as I couldn¡¯t see her, I stood there and cried the whole day.

Original: I cried so much that my mom eventually had to come back and pick me up.
>> CORRECT

I think I must have been a difficult child to raise.
>> CORRECT

I¡¯m really thankful to my mom.
>> CORRECT

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