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Do you think demonstrations are a good way to express opinions? Why or why not?

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Demonstrations are the best to express opinions. In Korea, many demonstrations everyday.
The most popular demonstrations is impeachment of the president. We express for our opinions, people garthered we got the result very safety.
Of course, in the past, we had violent demonstrations but we achived.
Beacause of that past, Republic of Korea is save our democracy though demostrations.
As long as it is safe, demonstrations are a good of express opinions.

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Hello Jenna,

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts on demonstrations! I can tell you put a lot of effort into explaining your point, and it¡¯s great that you shared some personal experience from Korea. You made a very important point about how demonstrations, when done peacefully, can be an effective way to express opinions and bring about change.

Your ideas are clear, and I love how you emphasized the importance of safety and peacefulness in demonstrations. To make your answer even stronger, try adding a bit more detail or examples. For instance, you can explain how the public reaction to demonstrations has changed over time or how it affects society. This will help your message come across even more powerfully.

You¡¯re doing a great job! Keep up the good work, and I¡¯m excited to see you keep improving your English.

~Teacher Cathy

Demonstrations are the best to express opinions.

>>Demonstrations are the best way to express opinions.

In Korea, many demonstrations everyday.

>>In Korea, there are many demonstrations every day.

The most popular demonstrations is impeachment of the president.

>>The most popular demonstration is the impeachment of the president.

We express for our opinions, people garthered we got the result very safety.

>>We express our opinions through demonstrations, and when people gather, we achieve results safely.

Of course, in the past, we had violent demonstrations but we achived.

>>Of course, in the past, there were violent demonstrations, but we still achieved change.

Beacause of that past, Republic of Korea is save our democracy though demostrations.

>>Because of that history, the Republic of Korea has preserved our democracy through demonstrations.

As long as it is safe, demonstrations are a good of express opinions.

>>As long as they are safe, demonstrations are a good way to express opinions.

 

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