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What¡¯s the best memory you have from a family dinner?

To be honest, I don't like having dinner with my family.
Ever since I was young, I was always scolded during meals and told to lose weight, so mealtimes felt uncomfortable.
But if I didn¡¯t eat with them, I¡¯d get in even more trouble, so I forced myself to join.
Still, if I had to pick a good memory, it would be when we went on a trip to the sea and had seafood together.
I love seafood.
I still remember the sashimi and grilled clams we had that day—it makes my mouth water just thinking about it.

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Hi Isabel. Thank you for sharing your thoughts so honestly. I can understand why mealtimes were difficult for you, and I admire the way you expressed those emotions in your writing. Despite the challenges, it¡¯s wonderful that you have at least one cherished memory of dining with your family. Your description of the seafood was vivid and engaging. I could almost taste it! Keep expressing yourself through writing, and remember that your feelings are valid. You did a great job! 

~ T. Lia

To be honest, I don't like having dinner with my family.
>> CORRECT

Ever since I was young, I was always scolded during meals and told to lose weight, so mealtimes felt uncomfortable.
>> CORRECT

But if I didn¡¯t eat with them, I¡¯d get in even more trouble, so I forced myself to join.
>> CORRECT

Still, if I had to pick a good memory, it would be when we went on a trip to the sea and had seafood together.
>> CORRECT

I love seafood.
>> CORRECT

I still remember the sashimi and grilled clams we had that day—it makes my mouth water just thinking about it.
>> I still remember the sashimi and grilled clams we had that day; it makes my mouth water just thinking about them.
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