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Do Korean parents teach their children how to sit properly at the dining table?

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Yes, because most people think sit properly at the dining table is important so Korean parents teach sit properly at the dining table.

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                       Do Korean parents teach their children how to sit properly at the dining table?


Yes, because most people think sit properly at the dining table is important so Korean parents teach sit properly at the dining table.
>> Yes, because most people think sitting properly at the dining table is important so Korean parents teach this to their children. 
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