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I read a book 'The anxious generation' written by an American social psychologist Jonathan Hiadt.

He is warning the dangers of distal and online world.

He explained than children lost play and activity outside because of bad adults.

Timid parents and distal industry are the criminals.

I agree his opinions sincerely.

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Hello, Ms. Lily!
The book you've read sounds interesting, and I would have to agree with what you wrote about the culprit: the parents and the online world. It takes a village to raise a child; the influence of these factors will create a strong or a weak person.
Have a good afternoon!
Aki~

I read a book 'The anxious generation' written by an American social psychologist Jonathan Hiadt.
>>> I read the book titled 'The anxious generation' written by an American social psychologist Jonathan Hiadt.

He is warning the dangers of distal and online world.
>>> He is warning about the dangers of the distant and online world.

He explained than children lost play and activity outside because of bad adults.
>> He explained that children lost play and activity outside because of bad adults.

Timid parents and distal industry are the criminals.
>>>  Timid parents and distant industry are the criminals.
>>>  Timid parents and distant industry are the main culprits.

I agree his opinions sincerely.
>>> I agree with his opinions sincerely.
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