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Writing task : What are the disadvantages of meeting clients in person?

A : First of all, it is a cost.
To meet clients in person, me or they are need to spend transportation cost.
Second is time.
To meet clients in person, me or they should spend time.
As i am dealing with abroad countries, there will be spent a lot of cost and time.
So, i prefer contact with them by an email or a message app.

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Hi, Eddy!
I totally agree with you. Meeting clients in person requires time and money, especially in your case where your clients are from overseas. Great job with your sentences. Just take note that instead of 'me or they,' you can use 'I or they.'
- T. Caitlyn 
 First of all, it is a cost.
>> First of all, it is costly.
To meet clients in person, me or they are need to spend transportation cost.
>> To meet clients in person, either I or they need to spend on transportation costs.
Second is time.
>> CORRECT
To meet clients in person, me or they should spend time.
>> To meet clients in person, either I or they need to spend time.
As i am dealing with abroad countries, there will be spent a lot of cost and time.
>> As I am dealing with foreign countries, a lot of cost and time will be spent.
So, i prefer contact with them by an email or a message app.
>> So, I prefer to contact them via email or a messaging app.
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