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Whose advice do you follow more, your parents¡¯ or your friends¡¯ advice?

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I think it will depend on the situation.
First, For live a life, I follow my parents advice.
They advice is lead to right way.
On the other hand, My friend's advice is helpful for Social life.
That is why currently, we works the same generation.

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Hello Chris


I can see you're trying hard to learn. Your discipline is good, keep it up. Keep applying in your daily life what you learn every day. Knowledge will give you power. Power will give the confidence that you need.  You can do it if others can, so can you. Enjoy your day! ^^
T. Jeny


This is good question.
>>This is a good question.
I think it will depend on the situation.
>>correct
First, For live a life, I follow my parents advice.
>>For concerns about life, I will follow my parent's advice first.
They advice is lead to right way.
>>I will prioritize their advice right away.
On the other hand, My friend's advice is helpful for Social life.
>>On the other hand, My friend's advice is helpful for my social life.
That is why currently, we works the same generation.
>>That's why, we work together,
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