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Write some strange but interesting information that you know about the moon

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The moon is very cold at night and the moon is very hot at night.
And the reason why there is ice on the moon is because I think the moon is very cold at night so the moon have ice.

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              Write some strange but interesting information that you know about the moon. 



The moon is very cold at night and the moon is very hot at night.
>> The moon is very cold and very hot at night. 

And the reason why there is ice on the moon is because I think the moon is very cold at night so the moon have ice.
>> And the reason there is ice on the moon is because I think the moon is very cold at night so the moon has ice. 

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