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Q : Do you prefer traveling alone, with friends, or with family? Why?

A : After traveling alone this time, i can tell you that i prefer traveling with friends or family.
My previous trip to Vietnam was pretty good. However, i thought it was much better if i am not alone.
I felt a little lonely when i was eating or drinking.
Traveling abroad alone was a good experience, however i like enjoy the trip with my friends or family.
So, i would go next trip with my friends or family.

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Hello Eddy,

Great job on your answer!  You shared your personal experience in a clear and natural way, which makes your writing interesting to read. I love that you talked about your trip to Vietnam and how it helped you realize what kind of travel you enjoy the most. Personal experiences make answers more meaningful!

You also did a good job explaining your feelings. You didn¡¯t just say, ¡°I prefer traveling with friends or family,¡± but you also explained why - because you felt a little lonely while eating or drinking. That¡¯s great reasoning!

To make your answer even better, you could try adding more details. For example, what was your favorite part of traveling alone? Was there something that made you feel happy or excited? And next time you travel with friends or family, where would you like to go? Details like these will make your writing even more engaging!

Keep up the great work! You're improving, and I can see your confidence in English growing. Keep practicing, and soon you¡¯ll express your ideas even more smoothly!

~Teacher Cathy

 

After traveling alone this time, i can tell you that i prefer traveling with friends or family.

>>After traveling alone this time, I can say that I prefer traveling with friends or family.

My previous trip to Vietnam was pretty good.

>>CORRECT

OR>>My recent trip to Vietnam was quite enjoyable.

However, i thought it was much better if i am not alone.

>>However, I felt that it would be much better if I weren't alone.

I felt a little lonely when I was eating or drinking.

>>CORRECT

OR>>I felt a bit lonely while eating or drinking.

Traveling abroad alone was a good experience, however i like enjoy the trip with my friends or family.

>>Traveling abroad alone was a good experience; however, I enjoy trips with my friends or family more.

So, i would go next trip with my friends or family.

>>So, I plan to take my next trip with friends or family.

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