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I think studying international news is a great thing. This is because by studying international news, we can know the international trend and make the right choices accordingly.
However, there are some people who do not think so. What we learn at school is basic. In other words, we learn the things that people need to live. Examples are math, science, society, and history. We can become better people by learning these basic studies.
There is nothing international about these basic studies. Rather, there are people who think that it can confuse students.
I disagree with that. International studies are necessary, and as I mentioned earlier, it is essential to read the flow well and make good choices.

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Hi there Lee~!^^ You did an excellent job establishing the context and clearly outlining the central theme of your essay. By presenting a thoughtful opening, you set a strong foundation for the argument that follows, making it easy for the reader to understand the direction of your analysis. The way you framed the issue not only engages but also encourages a deeper exploration of the topic in the body of the essay.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think studying international news is a great thing.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
 This is because by studying international news, we can know the international trend and make the right choices accordingly.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
However, there are some people who do not think so.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
 What we learn at school is basic. 
>>>CORRECT~!^^
In other words, we learn the things that people need to live. 
>>>CORRECT~!^^
Examples are math, science, society, and history. 
>>>CORRECT~!^^
We can become better people by learning these basic studies.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
There is nothing international about these basic studies. 
>>>CORRECT~!^^
Rather, there are people who think that it can confuse students.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
I disagree with that. International studies are necessary, and as I mentioned earlier, it is essential to read the flow well and make good choices.
>>>CORRECT~!^^
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