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Q : How can South Korea maintain its position as a top global economy?

A : The South Korea is a top 10 country in the global economy.
Although we don`t have many natural resources, we became a top global economy by enthusiasm of the nationals.
The Korean peoples did work 6days per week. Also, The Korean parents have focused on their child`s educations.
By this efforts, The South Korea became a top global economy and can remain its position.

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Hello Eddy,

Thank you for doing your homework. Your answer highlights the hard work and dedication of Korean people, which is a strong and meaningful point. It's great to see your confidence in discussing such an important topic.

To make your writing even better, try adding more details or examples. For instance, you could mention specific industries like technology, automobiles, or K-culture that have helped South Korea stay competitive. Also, thinking about future strategies, like innovation or global partnerships, would make your response even more insightful.

You're already doing so well, keep going! The more you practice expressing your thoughts in English, the stronger and more natural your writing will become. Great effort!

~Teacher Cathy

 

The South Korea is a top 10 country in the global economy.

>>South Korea is a top 10 country in the global economy.

Although we don`t have many natural resources, we became a top global economy by enthusiasm of the nationals.

>>Although we don¡¯t have many natural resources, we became a top global economy through the enthusiasm of our people.

The Korean peoples did work 6days per week.

>>The Korean people worked six days per week.

Also, The Korean parents have focused on their child`s educations.

>>Also, Korean parents have focused on their children's education.

By this efforts, The South Korea became a top global economy and can remain its position.

>>By these efforts, South Korea became a top global economy and can maintain its position.

 

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